Fan-Fiction WH40k Comments

As you have guessed. This will be the new place to place yer comments on my fan-fiction. Please comment, as it is what spurs me on to write.

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Claims of innocence mean nothing; they only serve to prove a foolish lack of caution.
- Judge Traggat, Selected Sayings, Vol. III, Chapter IV

FIRST COMMENT!

Honestly, I don't have much to critique you about. You writing has energy and a certain level of "awesome" about it.

Can someone please move the comments from my Fan-Fic to here instead of in my story Spot?

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Survival is no birthright, but a prize wrested from an uncaring galaxy by forgotten heroes.

Great. I noticed some inconsistancies in style, but that will solve its self as you develope as a writer. Definitaly entertaining and worth a read.

4/5?